Respuesta :
Points for your argument:
The language used is not academic
The argument is not clearly supported
The augment does not give an oppositional view
There is no strong conclusion.
The language used is not academic
The argument is not clearly supported
The augment does not give an oppositional view
There is no strong conclusion.
Point of View - personal. most statements begin with "i" which is not effective.
Transitions = little to no transition in between points. Need to connect and make the argument flow better.