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On #11 you should take out ¨It was really cool¨ because that is an opinion because maybe some people won think its cool. You should say "When the Boston Red Sox won the world series in 2004, they beat the highly paid New York Yankees and showed New York Yankees owner that money isn't everything. you got number 1-10 right. You need to add space to #12 because then your teacher won't understand what your writing. On #13 you wrote they live on the islands of indonesia but in the paragraph above it says that they live in the tropical rainforest of Sumatra. On #14 you should write out everything he did because then if you were summarizing what that paragraph was and you just wrote he made many paintingś your not giving the facts about him. Your welcome, hope this helps
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